Re: [Brahms-l] winter workshop proceeding

Hi Flemming,

  Nice contribution. Here are some minor comments:

Page 1, Paragraph 1
  Line 3
     that that -------> that
  Line 6
      it is not clear what nuclear effects you are reffering to
      in the statement "..such nuclear effects.."
      They may be mentioned in the references [1-4], but I think
      it is a good idea to mention them in the text.
  Last line
      time extensive -------> time an extensive

Page 2, (paragraph 2 continued from page 1)
   Line 2
      when you say "under these conditions", do you mean
      high pt, forward angles, transversly polarized beam?
      If you have something else in mind, you may want to state
      the conditions under which the SSA was measured.
   Line 4
      "for the observed ... has been", 
      something is incomplete, did you want to say
      "for the observed large SSA have been ... ? 
   Line 8
      ... base of pQCD ----> based on pQCD,
page 2, paragraph before section 2
   The contribution ----> This contribution

Page 2, paragraph 1 section 2
   Line 5
     for measuring multiplicities, luminosity , and detrmining
     the interaction vertex, and provides a start time 
     ------->
     for measuring multiplicities and luminosity , determining
     the interaction vertex, and providing a start time
Page 2 section 2 paragraph 2
   Line 4
      in front -----> in front of
   Line 5
      followed by a two  ----> followed by two
Page 2 section 2 paragraph 3
   Line 3
      did you intentionally leave out H1 because it
     was not used in the measurement? Since you start
     the paragraph with a description of the FS, you
      might want to include it and say PID was done using
      H2 (with RICH veto) and RICH

Page 4
   In various palces you say "functions that fragment".
   I would prefer to say, e.g., "functions that describe 
   the fragmentation"

page 5
   Line 5
     In Fig3 for ...
      this line seems to be incomplete
   3rd line above section 3

     considerable ---> considerably

page 5, section 3, paragraph 1
   Line 3
      customary ---->customarily

Page 6, paragraph 2
   Line 2
      excepts ---> except
Page 6, paragraph 3
  Line 3
      ptrange --------> pt range  (space)
      xfrange---------> xf range  (space)
  Line 6
      approximate ----->approximatly

Page 7, paragraph before summary
  Line 4
    Sivers ----> the Sivers
  Line 10
    The4 -----> The

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Selemon
   
   
  

-----Original Message-----
From: brahms-l-bounces_at_lists.bnl.gov on behalf of Flemming Videbaek
Sent: Mon 5/7/2007 10:19 AM 
To: brahms-l
Subject: [Brahms-l] winter workshop proceeding
 
Dear Collaborator,


Attached is a draft of my contribution on behalf of the collaboration for the winter workshop in bigsky.
The material included is taken from the PRL yet to be accepted,  and results presented at SPIN2006, and DNP.
Part of the text is from these publications.
The page limit is 8 pages, which is just met. The deadline (second) is Friday 11 this month. 
Please send me your comments for finalizing the contribution.

regards
    Flemming


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Physics Department 
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Brookhaven National Laboratory
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