[Brahms-l] Stopping paper

Dear Peter et al.,
Just a few comments and suggestions on the stopping paper.

Overall, very nice job!

Some nitpicking ...

The University of Kansas ZIP code should be 66045 rather than 66049.
This is a mistake that I introduced with our initial multiplicity paper 
and it
has been copied on subsequent publications..

Abstract: When I printed the pdf file several symbols in the sentence
starting "The net-proton yield..." were either missing or garbled.  
This may be
a "Mac" thing, but I don't see similar problems elsewhere in the paper.

Para. 2:  "lose" rather than "loose"  (very different meanings...)

Para. 8, and elsewhere:  The "%" symbol is detached from the associated 
number.
This looks funny.  Also the symbol is missing after the 80-90 range.

Para. 8: missing comma:  "...used to veto pions and kaons, a 
special..."  (You need
to set off the entire clause.)

Fig.1: I printed the draft out on a B&W printer: On my copy the p and 
net-p
symbols are indistinguishable.

Fig. 1 caption:  Your "stippled" lines look "dashed" to me.  I'd use the
more common notation.

Para. 10:  With all of the  "~"s and other caveats, it is not clear if 
the
decrease of <pt> from 1.0 GeV/c to 0.8 GeV/c is supposed to be taken
as being significant.  Is it possible to be more specific and quote
numbers with reasonable uncertainties, doing away with the "~"...

Fig.2:  Again, p and net-p symbols look the same in B&W.

Fig. 2 caption:  "correction has been" rather than "correction have 
been"

Para. 11: "...were estimated from the difference in dN/dy values 
obtained using different spectrometer settings covering..".
I appreciate this adds words, but I don't think the current "from 
settings covering" is clear.

Fig. 3:  Again, there is a problem distinguishing black and grey on the 
B&W output.

Para. 16: This first sentence is very difficult to read.  I'd suggest 
rewording as:
"A probability of c = 0.53+-0.05 if found for identifying a p 
originating from a Lambda decay
as a primary proton, as calculated using GEANT Monte Carlo simulations 
requiring that
tracks point back to the IP."

Para. 18: (1st sentence) "...was found to be equal..."  (change were to 
was)

Para. 19: (1st sentence) "At forward rapidity Lambdas have not been 
measured..."

Para. 20:  "...with Bjorken's picture..."

Para 21: Equation (3) should have a punctuation at the end (a period).  
The
sentence immediately following the equation should not start a new
paragraph.

References:  I believe these are set up in Phys. Lett. format rather 
than
PRL.
      Each reference should end with a period.
      It should be Zi-wei Lin (not Z. w. Lin)


That's all I can find...

Regards,
Steve


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