From: Dieter Rohrich (dieter@fi.uib.no)
Date: Tue Jul 01 2003 - 11:24:33 EDT
Hei Ian, here are the comments from the Bergen group: 1) We have to change the title because it is misleading; it reads as if there is a suppression in d+Au. Proposal: "High pt suppression at different pseudorapidities in Au+Au collisions and its absence in d+Au at ...." 2) Abstract: Remove the last two sentences "These measurements .... collisions. The lack .......collisions." We should stick to our data and should note make statements we cannot substantiate. 3) Page 1, Introduction: First sentence: replace "i.e." with "e.g.". Remove the rest of the paragraph (from "The first ..." until "... indeed formed in Au+Au collisions at RHIC."). Continue with "In order to ...." We don't need this discussion, and it cannot stay like it is - e.g. who says e > 5 GeV/fm**3? reference? Second paragraph: First sentence: remove "scattered" Second+third sentences: Rephrase to "Such particles are associated with jet production from initial hard parton scatterings. These partons are predicted to suffer energy loss....." Last sentence: remove "process is referred to as" and "and" 4) page 2 Fig. 1: Figure: replace "N+N" with "p+pbar" 5) page 3 Fig. 3: Add "Au+Au" to the figure and mention the collision system in the caption. Mention in the next that N_bin is the average number of bin. coll. last paragraph: typo "pseudorapidity" 6) page 4 3. paragraph: remove "directly" 4. paragraph /summary: remove "In fact, the oberservation of a Cronin .... nuclei." We cannot make such a statement based on our data. With best wishes, UiB ----------------------------------------------------------------- Dieter Roehrich | Fysisk institutt | Email: Dieter.Rohrich@fi.uib.no Universitetet i Bergen | Tel: +47-555-82722 Allegt. 55 | Fax: +47-555-89440 N-5007 Bergen, Norway | WWW: http://www.fi.uib.no/php/drhrich.html On Tue, 1 Jul 2003, Ian Bearden wrote: > Dear collaborators, > > Here is a new version of the High Pt draft. > I have tried to accommodate most suggestions, as you will perhaps have > seen in the flurry of emails in the past few hours. > Please read this draft very carefully (but quickly!). I hope you find > it acceptable. > Best regards, > Ian
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