From: Trine S. Tveter (trine@lynx.uio.no)
Date: Tue Jul 01 2003 - 09:19:58 EDT
Hi all,
A few additional comments from Oslo:
Spelling of the new co-author names: S. Lindal, R. Lystad
(just a reminder ...)
Par 1: 200GeV - remove italics, space between number and unit?
(Scattered throughout the paper - several lacking spaces
between number and unit)
Figure 1: The reference spectra are shown as dashed lines, but
the label "N+N reference" is preceded by a solid line.
Figure 2: Explain in caption the uncertainty band shown for the
N_{bin} (?)
I agree with Peter that some more discussion on sys. errors would
be good if space considerations allow it. For instance, the referee
will probably be curious about the momentum resolution effects.
I also agree with Bjørn and Dieter that one should add one sentence
(if possible) to explain why we do not have to worry about the d+Au
vtx resolution.
The typo "psuedorapidity" occurs also in Par. 4 and Par. 7.
Inconsistent notation - R_{cp} in text, R_{CP} in figures?
Refs. 1, 8: Quote name of our first author as for the other
collaborations?
Ref. 9: New first author on STAR nucl-ex/0306024 - J. Adams
Ref. 10: New first author on PHENIX nucl-ex/0306021 - S.S. Adler
Ref. 11: Albajar - should be Nucl.Phys. B335.
Refs. 16 - 18 are tricky - do they refer to the same data as those
shown in Figure 5 in E. Wang and X.N.Wang, Phys.Rev. C64 (2001) 034901 -
very similar to JJG's Moscow Cronin effect figure?
They use the following references:
M.M. Aggarwal {\em et al.}, [WA98 collaboration],
Phys.~Rev.~Lett.~{\bf 81}, 4087 (1998), Erratum, {\em ibid.} {\bf 84},
578 (2000).
H. Appelshauser {\em et al.}, [NA49 collaboration],
Phys.~Rev.~Lett.~{\bf 82}, 2471 (1999).
G.~Agakishiev {\em et al.}, [CERES collaboration], hep-ex/0003012
Ref. 21: (2003) occurs twice.
Last but not least: Congratulations to Claus and the other NBI guys
with an excellent piece of work, fighting against nearly impossible
deadlines!
Cheers, Trine
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