From: yin.zhongbao@fi.uib.no
Date: Tue Jul 01 2003 - 06:09:23 EDT
Dear Ian.
The latest draft looks great. Just a few minor comments.
1) Can we change rapidity to pseudorapidity in the whole draft?
2) Can we drop the dot at the end of the title?
3) The last sentence of paragraph 2:
"This process is referred to as high p_T suppression..."
The process you described above actually is called "jet quenching".
And high p_T suppression as far as we know is only an experimental
observation or phenomenon.
4) In paragraph 4:
"...using multiplicity detectors positioned around the IP. The IP
position..."
Since the meaning of the two IPs is slightly different, I would use
"... around the nominal IP" for the first one.
5) FIG. 2 caption:
"Bottom row: ratio of the ... for the most central and most peripheral
collisions..."
I would use "...for the most central (0-10%) and peripheral (40-60%)
collisions" since 40-60% central is not the most peripheral.
6) Can we use <Nbin> instead of Nbin in order to be consistent with our
multiplicity paper?
7) In paragraph 7:
"Beyond p_T \approx 2Gev/c, R_AuAu is expected to be close to 1."
It sounds like something is missing. I would suggest to write it along the
lines of
"Beyond p_T \approx 2Gev/c, R_AuAu is expected to be close to 1 if ...
(for example no coherent effects.)"
8) FIG. 4:
For the title I would use "Nuclear Modification Factor".
In the caption, change "colliisons" to "collisions".
9) In the summary:
"The suppression is seen to diminish with decreasing collision centrality
and is absent in collisions between a two-nucleon system and a gold
nucleus."
I would suggest to write it as simple as:
"The suppression is seen to diminish with decreasing collision centrality
and is absent in d+Au collisions."
Cheers.
Zhongbao
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On Mon, 30 Jun 2003, Ian Bearden wrote:
> Dear Collaborators:
> Please find the latest draft attached as .ps and .pdf.
> This draft has the final figures, as we see them.
> This should be considered a 'final draft' The idea is to submit to PRL
> before midnight tomorrow,
> so please make your comments quickly. We would appreciate very much
> if, where possible, you provide a suggestion as to how to change things
> you don't like while keeping in mind that we are very close to the
> allowable length for PRL.
> Enjoy reading the draft, and please comment as quickly as possible.
> Best regards,
> Claus and Ian
>
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