From: Stephen J. Sanders (ssanders@ku.edu)
Date: Fri Jun 27 2003 - 16:03:24 EDT
Hi,
Some comments and corrections, in order that they appear in the draft.
Most of these are minor wording suggestions and
may have been covered by others, I have not tried to
check my comments against those already posted.
I'm working on the draft distributed Thursday afternoon.
I am somewhat worried about the statement trying to finesse our
lack of a centrality cut for the dAu results: As I review the Phenix
contribution to THE COLLOQUIUM, it appears that they see a rather
significant centrality dependence, presumably consistent with a
Cronin effect.
...steve
H. Ito should have 1,11 affiliation
Add B. Neumann (11) to author list
Change Lawerence, Kansas to Lawrence, Kansas
Abstract: Change "particles in a medium created" to "particles in the
medium created"
"state effects as explanation" to
"state effects as an explanation"
1st para: "extremely hot high density region" to "extremely hot,
high-density region"
"quark deconfinement, the quark-gluon" to "quark deconfinement, i.e.,
the quark-gluon"
"measured in a region around" to "measured in the region
around"
"particle ratios, at midrapidity" to "particle ratios at midrapidity"
reduced to 29 MeV from what?
2nd para: This may be correct, but is it true that the suppression
medium is characterized as a
"dense hadronic medium"?
4th para: "MRS and" to "MRS, and"
5th para: Unclear what the parenthetical comment after "most central
events" means. Font problem?
"Additional spectrometer trigger were" to "Additional spectrometer
triggers were"
"found in [4,5,10]" to "found in refs. [4,5,10]"
6th para: "Centrality selection of the" to "Centrality selection for
the"
We quote a BB vtx resolution of 0.9 cm in mult paper.
Beam counters at 2.2 m.
"and the tracks in first" to "and the tracks in the first"
"opening are" to "opening angle are"
7th para: "centralities (xxx,xxx,xx)." to "centralitties of xxx, xxx,
xxx, respectively."
"and where applicable" to "and, where applicable"
8th para: "p+p collisions, is to" to "p+p collisions is to"
fix Nbin
9th para: change "wherefore" to "whereas"
"N_bin reduces" to "N_bin value reduces"
"and generally explained" to "and is generally explained"
"central collisions at, while" to "central collisions, while"
"We estimate it to 20%" to "We estimate it to be 20%"
fix Nbin
rewrite last sentence. Suggestion: "The advantage of using this
measure is that it is
independent of the pp reference spectrum and of most of the
systematic
errors that influcence the deduced hadron cross sections for the
Au+Au
reactions."
10th para: fix Nbin
"even superior" to "even greater"
11th para: remove end parenthesis after first sentence.
"N_bin." to "N_bin value."
12th para: "i.e entrance channel effects...might limit" to "i.e.
entrance channel effects
resulting from the high laboratory energy of the colliding nuclei
might limit"
13th para: "...at two rapdities." to "...at two rapidities for Au+Au
collisions at Sqrt[snn]=200 GeV."
"effectscontributing" to "effects contributing"
"absorbtion" to "absorption"
Fig. 1: The scaling factors referred to in caption are not shown.
Fig. 2: The highest Pt point is missing for the 40-60%, eta = 2
spectrum.
We should be consistent: R_AA or R_AuAu?
We should be consistent: eta approx=2 or eta = 2.2?
Fig. 4: Caption should have d+Au rather than D+Au
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