Hej Flemming, et al., Here are some comments about Flemmings talk, many me be just matters of taste (but since mine is good, pay attention! :-) ) 1. It might be nice to have a BRAHMS logo on the slides 2. Check capitalization. PowerPoint screws it up sometimes because it capitalizes after periods and carriage returns 3. Motivation and Goals: is it worthwhile reminding people that we were the only ones looking away from y=0? 3rd bullet: Other goals emerged from RHIC results (it seems more positive to me, but just a suggestion) 4. Slide 3, I think the text is too small and the pictures are too small. I played with it quickly and sent it to FV. 5. Slide 4 is difficult to read. I also played with it and sent to FV 6. Slide 5: make figure bigger 7. Slide 6: maybe a bit more on this slide ;-) 8.Slide 7: this is rapidity loss and you say it is constant while showing a figure with a line that has a positive slope. Of course, the two RHIC points ARE the same, but one has to really look to see it with that line. Also, the figure should be bigger 9. Slide 9: you may want to steal Hans's slides for this, they are nice. 10. Please don't say "take away message" since what you show isn't management bullshit. Maybe "What have we learned from 'net-protons'" I'll wait with further comments until the next version. Cheers Ian On 26/03/2009, at 03.06, flemming videbaek wrote: > Dear Collaborator, > > a number of drafts of qm talks have been put onto the brahms indoco > page at > > http://indico.cern.ch/conferenceDisplay.py?confId=55395 > > - Hans Dalsgaard has been circulated, but I lost the pointer. Can > this be circulated too.\ > - I have more work to do on my own hopefully by tomorrow evening a > new version can be posted > Please send comments, suggestions to authors and/or list > > regards > Flemming > > > > Flemming videbaek > videbaek @ bnl.gov > Brookhaven National Lab > 631-344-4106 > cell: 631-681-1596 > > > > _______________________________________________ > Brahms-l mailing list > Brahms-l_at_lists.bnl.gov > https://lists.bnl.gov/mailman/listinfo/brahms-l > _______________________________________________ Brahms-l mailing list Brahms-l_at_lists.bnl.gov https://lists.bnl.gov/mailman/listinfo/brahms-lReceived on Thu Mar 26 2009 - 11:07:24 EDT
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