Re: [Brahms-l] Again for the updated paper

From: Stephen Sanders <ssanders@ku.edu>
Date: Thu Jun 30 2005 - 19:03:59 EDT
Hi Zhongbao,  Some comments and suggestions on the latest draft:

Abstract:   change last sentence:  "...and the results indicate that a 
significant fraction
of the charged hadrons produced at intermediate..."

Para 1...
  "These experimental results have motivated several suggestions on how
hadrons are produced at intermediate pT [9-12], such as the possibility 
that boosted
quarks from a collectively expanding QGP [10-12] recombine to form the
final-state hadrons.   An interesting observation from the 
BRAHMS....collisions[4,8].
This raises the possibility that initial-state effects may also 
influence
hadron production at intermediate pT [ref]."

Para 2...
"....at both mid-rapidity and forward pseudorapidity eta = 2.2. "   
(Otherwise you
will be defining eta as a symbol that refers to rapidity...)

Para 3...
"...for the FS [8], where p is written in units of ..."   (missing 
article)

"...kaons up to momenta of 3.2 GeV/c and 2.0 GeV/c, respectively.  For 
pions above
2 GeV/c..."

General comment:  It is not clear from the text how the overlap regions 
were handled, or what
is intended by the estimates of kaon contamination of the pion and 
proton spectra.  If you
are doing what I think might be the case, I would suggest a rewording 
such as:

"Above 2 GeV/c a correction is applied for the kaons that fall in the 
region where the pion and kaon 2 sigma PID cuts overlap.  This allows 
the pion pT spectrum to be  extended to 3 GeV/c, at which point the 
kaon correction is about 5%."

"Between 7.1 GeV/c and 7.9 GeV/c, the proton spectrum is corrected for 
the kaons falling within the overlapping PID regions.  Between 7.9 
GeV/c
and 9 GeV/c, the Cherenkov threshold for protons, the RICH detector is 
used to determine the kaon contamination of the proton spectrum.  The 
kaon correction in this region is less than 6% of the proton yield.    
Above 9 GeV/C, the RICH detector can be used directly to identify the
proton yields."


Para 4... (last sentence)
"...has not been corrected but is accounted for..."

Para 5...  (first sentence)
"The top row..."

Mid-way through this paragraph rapidity densities are given in units of 
GeV?!   Maybe the unit can be moved inside
the parenthesis to be associated with the slope parameters?

Figure 1.    I'm pretty sure the size of the inside captions will fail 
to satisfy the rules of the APS style manual.  Also, the open cross
should be specified as p+p.

Para 6...
"The bottom row of Figure 1..."

"...making a comparison of anti-proton to pion yields difficult."

Para 7...

If possible I would state what part of the measurement has a 20% 
systematic uncertainty, and what has a 24% uncertainty.
Stating a systematic uncertainty range seems strange...

"Similar to the unidentified charged hadrons[4]... and levels off at a 
value below unity above 1.5 GeV/c, indicating that...

"...yields at forward rapidity show an even stronger suppression, 
indicating...might be contributing to the strong high..."

"This indicates that a significant part of the particle yield at high 
pT can be attributed to ..."

Fig. 2:  Same comment about quoting a 20-24% systematic uncertainty 
range.

Para 8 and Fig. 3:

I think you need to show the corresponding pbar/pi- ratios for pp 
collisions.   This could be done
with two curves and would help emphasize the importance of the 
reference spectra in
obtaining the observed rapidity dependence of the RAA values.

Para 9...
"...effects such as gluon saturation contributing to the suppression.  
However, the suppression is not seen
for (anti-)protons at intermediate pT at either mid-rapidity or forward 
pseudorapidity eta = 2.2.

"The ratios at intermediate pT seem to decrease with rapidity.  At 
mid-rapidity the ratio can be qualitatively
described by a parton recombination model with collective flow."

Comment:  The final sentence focuses on the longitudinal extent of the 
created medium.   It ignores the possibility
that saturation effects may be playing a role.   Is this fair?


Overall, Nice job!

...steve

On Jun 29, 2005, at 10:02 PM, yin.zhongbao@ift.uib.no wrote:

> Dear All,
>
> thanks to  Ramiro's comments, I have updated the paper and also updated
> two references. It is still located at
> www.ift.uib.no/~yin/hptPiAndProton_v5.pdf
> www.ift.uib.no/~yin/hptPiAndProton_v5.ps
>
> Thank you for your further help and comments.
>
> Best regards,
> Zhongbao
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