From: Trine S. Tveter (trine@lynx.uio.no)
Date: Mon Jun 30 2003 - 17:49:03 EDT
Hi Ian et al.,
A few minor corrections / comments to the latest draft (barely
on the correct side of midnight ...)
- Author list:
I think the newest Norwegian names should be S. Lindal and R. Lystad.
- Several places, scattered throughout the text:
Au+Au, d+Au, p+p with and without italics
Same for units (GeV/c etc.)
- Par. 1:
It's not quite clear to me how the particle production dN/dEta
suggests chemical equilibrium.
- Par. 3:
Quote Ref. [12] for the UA1 data already here, where the
p+pbar reference spectrum is mentioned for the first time?
We have measured similar spectra -> charged hadron spectra?
- Par. 5:
0% - 10%, etc. -> 0 - 10%, etc. - more readable?
I notice that "corrected for momentum resolution" has been dropped
in this version - will the final figures be based on Ian's suggestion
of utilizing data from the different settings only up to a setting
dependent max. momentum?
- Par. 6:
Reference on sigma^{pp}_{inel} = 42 mb? I think STAR quote some
other values in their pp paper - 30-something (?)
- Par. 7:
... they tends -> tend towards 1 for the peripheral ...
... shows a clear decrease above p_T > 2 _GeV/c_ (add unit.)
- Par. 8:
"However, the strength of the underlying suppression mechanism (...)
may depend on the pseudorapidity density ..."
It's not quite clear to me how this is different from / expands on
the statement made just above.
- Par. 11:
... tranverse -> transverse momentum spectra ...
- References (only checked the sequence):
Present Ref. [14] (NIM paper) before Ref. [13] (Hijing)
Exchange Refs. [20] (Gallmeister) and [22] (Vitev)
Cheers, Trine
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