RE: MULT PAPER. vers. 33. That's it.

From: Chellis Chasman (chasman@sgs1.hirg.bnl.goV)
Date: Wed Nov 21 2001 - 11:16:11 EST

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    Hi-
    
    A)A few comments on word choice and  typos below:
    1) Caption Figure 1:  "Top panel"???
       Text figure 1: "Statistical....points where smaller..."???
        Also, are there any statistical errors shown?
    
    2)Figure 4 Caption: ....systematic errors TEND TO cancel out."
                  After all, the data compare two different energies
                  and years. 
    3)Figure 5 Caption: "...number of participants...for eta=0,????,
                   3.0 and 4.5".
    
    4)Page 3 2nd paragraph 3rd sentence: "The production of....
               collision processes and thus MAY depend on ...."
    
    5)Page 6 4th sentence from the bottom:  "This has previously been
               attributed....on the number of binary NUCLEON 
               collisions, N(coll)."  I don't think anyone counted
               partonic collisions in the codes.
    B)A comment on the text:
           On page 6 we knock AMPT (last  sentence first paragraph) 
           a little harshly. Kharzeev also doesn't do too well on
           the most peripheral reactions in Figure 3 and in Figure 4
           and 5 I'd say there about equally good. Why not just
           leave off the last part of the last sentence of this
           paragraph starting with "but.....collisions"
    C)Two comments on physics:
         1)  As I have said, I believe we have independent evidence 
           that the distributions become narrower with increased              
           centrality.  This seems counter-intuitive to me and thus
           an interesting observation.  Perhaps it is worth a
           sentence in the paper.
         2) We mention the fragmentaion region and even show a
             figure. However, there is no indication of the physics
             importance either on page 5 or in the conclusions. By 
             the way: Is .7<eta<1.5 the fragmentation region?
    D)Comment on Title:
         A agree with those who feel the title is too grandiose
         for the conclusion.  This paper is neither initiating this
         discussion nor resolving it. 
                              
                                Chellis                         
     
    



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