Re: [Brahms-dev-l] FW: Your_manuscript CS10219 Arsene

From: flemming videbaek <videbaek_at_bnl.gov>
Date: Fri, 6 Aug 2010 20:44:28 -0400
That could probably be done,
Let=t us discuss this,
F.

Flemming Videbaek
videbaek @ bnl.gov
Brookhaven National Lab
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On Aug 6, 2010, at 8:36 PM, Ramiro Debbe wrote:

> What about mid-rapidity. The referee is right, we are dealing with  
> very geometric quantities and disregard our ability to change the  
> geometry of the collisions. I was more afraid of man power problems.
> Ramiro
> On Aug 6, 2010, at 8:29 PM, flemming videbaek wrote:
>
>> I would think that getting centrality at high t will get difficult  
>> - at the present centrality we have 20-30 counts for deuterons,  
>> going to kess central we can likely only get ~10-14 counts at most.  
>> Protons is not an issue of course.
>>
>> Flemming
>>
>> Flemming Videbaek
>> videbaek @ bnl.gov
>> Brookhaven National Lab
>> Physics Department
>> Bldg 510D
>> Upton, NY 11973
>>
>> phone: 631-344-4106
>> cell     :  631-681-1596
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>> On Aug 6, 2010, at 8:22 PM, Ramiro Debbe wrote:
>>
>>> Great referee!  (with Jamaican accent?)
>>> Can we get some centrality dependence?
>>> His comments about our physics arguments are sobering but we can  
>>> certainly use his advice and improve our arguments.
>>> Ramiro
>>> On Aug 6, 2010, at 6:05 PM, flemming videbaek wrote:
>>>
>>>> Hi Michael,
>>>> I am going on vacation next week. I suggest you take the lead and
>>>> discuss it next Friday. JH will setup and lead that meeting
>>>>
>>>> Flemming
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Flemming Videbaek
>>>> videbaek @ bnl.gov
>>>> Brookhaven National Lab
>>>> Physics Department
>>>> Bldg 510D
>>>> Upton, NY 11973
>>>>
>>>> phone: 631-344-4106
>>>> cell     :  631-681-1596
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> On Aug 6, 2010, at 5:20 PM, Murray, Michael J wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> FYI
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Michael
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>>> From: prc_at_aps.org [mailto:prc_at_aps.org]
>>>>> Sent: Fri 8/6/2010 12:48 PM
>>>>> To: Murray, Michael J
>>>>> Subject: Your_manuscript CS10219 Arsene
>>>>>
>>>>> Re: CS10219
>>>>> Rapidity dependence of deuteron production in Au+Au collisions at
>>>>> sqrt s NN=200 GeV
>>>>> by I. Arsene, I. G. Bearden, D. Beavis, et al.
>>>>>
>>>>> Dear Dr. Murray,
>>>>>
>>>>> The above manuscript has been reviewed by one of our referees.
>>>>> Comments
>>>>> from the report appear below.
>>>>>
>>>>> These comments suggest that specific revisions of your  
>>>>> manuscript are
>>>>> in order. When you resubmit your manuscript, please include a  
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>>>>> criticisms contained in the report.
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>>>>> Report of the Referee -- CS10219/Arsene
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>>>>>
>>>>> Executive Summary:
>>>>> -----------------------------------------
>>>>> The paper is a straightforward, almost minimalist, presentation
>>>>> of a data set on proton and deuteron production in central Au+Au
>>>>> RHIC collisions over a wide range of rapidity, and antiproton and
>>>>> antideuteron production over a smaller range in rapidity.  The
>>>>> data are interpreted in terms of a standard coalescence picture
>>>>> and an extracted phase space density; some trends are noted but
>>>>> no definite physics conclusions are drawn.  As a simple data
>>>>> presentation exercise the paper is generally acceptable, though
>>>>> the physics impact of the data are significantly limited by
>>>>> being restricted to only central collisions in only one bin of
>>>>> centrality.
>>>>>
>>>>> Though I would not suggest it as a requirement for publication
>>>>> in the Physical Review, I would urge the authors to consider
>>>>> enlarging the paper to include data from a greater range of
>>>>> centrality classes -- based on the error bars shown in Fig 5
>>>>> it certainly looks as though sufficient statistics would be
>>>>> available.
>>>>>
>>>>> Modulo that decision, the paper has a number of minor errors
>>>>> in the physics introduction which should be addressed, as
>>>>> detailed below.  My basic recommendation, then, is that the
>>>>> paper will be suitable for publication with minor corrections.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Concerns:
>>>>> --------------------------------------
>>>>> (1) Centrality selection.  The data presented in Fig 3 are for  
>>>>> some
>>>>> particular event selection; but which?  One needs to scan the
>>>>> paper in some detail (or use a computer text search) to find
>>>>> the lone sentence "We present ... AuAu collisions with a  
>>>>> centrality
>>>>> range of 0-20%."  in the first paragraph under Section II.  
>>>>> Analysis.
>>>>> (Note that this sentence itself is not quite grammatically  
>>>>> correct.)
>>>>>
>>>>> Physics: Why was this one, and only one, centrality range chosen
>>>>> for this analysis?  There is no motivation mentioned in the paper
>>>>> at all, which is quite puzzling.  The paper describes  
>>>>> interpretation
>>>>> in terms of geometrical quantities such as the coherence volume
>>>>> implied
>>>>> by the B_2 measurement; it is only natural to ask, then, how these
>>>>> might change as the collision geometry/centrality is changed.  To
>>>>> present data from only one centrality selection, with no  
>>>>> explanation,
>>>>> seems quite odd and un-natural, and I would call it a glaring  
>>>>> defect.
>>>>> There is of course a limit on available particle statistics, but  
>>>>> it
>>>>> is far from clear (partly because there is so little detail  
>>>>> provided
>>>>> on the error analysis) that no statement could be made for any  
>>>>> other
>>>>> selections, even by breaking the current one into two.
>>>>>
>>>>> Analysis: The section on the data analysis should include a
>>>>> description
>>>>> of how the events were selected on centrality.
>>>>>
>>>>> Formatting: Assuming that the paper is to be published on just the
>>>>> central collision results, that fact should be made clear  
>>>>> throughout
>>>>> the work: it should appear in the title, in the abstract, in the
>>>>> summary and in the captions of all the figures and tables.  And,
>>>>> for that matter, the main data graphs such as Fig 3 should also
>>>>> state that these results are for the Au+Au collision system!
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> (2) Error analysis.  The presentation in Table I does a good  
>>>>> basic job
>>>>> of explaining the uncertainties: statistical errors are in the  
>>>>> table,
>>>>> systematics are characterized in the text.  All of the figures and
>>>>> tables should rise to this same standard:  what is shown by the  
>>>>> errors
>>>>> that are displayed?  and what are the sizes of the other sources?
>>>>>
>>>>> Elsewhere the treatment of uncertainties is uneven.  The  
>>>>> discussion
>>>>> of errors from the feed-down correction in Section II.D is quite
>>>>> quantitative; while the preceding section II.C on particle
>>>>> identification describes inefficiencies and contaminations, but  
>>>>> does
>>>>> not quote anything quantitative for the residual uncertainties  
>>>>> from
>>>>> these effects.  At a minimum the reader should be able to  
>>>>> appreciate
>>>>> the relative contributions of statistical versus systematic
>>>>> uncertainties, and what the dominant source is for the systematic,
>>>>> for every quantity quoted and plotted in the paper.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> (3) Abstract: "in contrast to lower energy data".  This should be
>>>>> re-worded to make clear that it refers to data from collisions
>>>>> at lower collision energies, rather than lower secondary particle
>>>>> energies.
>>>>>
>>>>> (4) p1 col2: "surrounding ... medium ensure energy and momentum
>>>>> conservation".  "Ensure" would be better as "allow" or "permit"
>>>>> or "enable".  Conservation laws always "ensure" that they are
>>>>> followed; the role of the medium is to "allow" p + n -> d
>>>>> to proceed without the need to emit a photon.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> (5) p1 col2 "As deuterons are formed inside the expanding system"
>>>>> Is this really true?  How do you know?  One could make the simple
>>>>> argument that particle within the medium are colliding often
>>>>> enough, on the order of once per ~1-10 fm/c or faster in the time
>>>>> before freezeout, then the constituent protons and neutrons will
>>>>> on average be off their mass shell by ~200-20 MeV at any given
>>>>> moment; if this is true, then how can one even distinguish a
>>>>> deuteron bound state, whose binding energy is only 2 MeV?
>>>>> The bound/unbound distinction doesn't apply over such short
>>>>> time scales.
>>>>> The same misconception appears later in the same paragraph
>>>>> with the phrase "deuterons are most likely formed very near
>>>>> freeze-out".  What, exactly, does "formed" mean here?  In order
>>>>> for a p,n pair to be meaningfully distinguished as either bound
>>>>> or unbound, the degree to which they are off-mass-shell must be
>>>>> no larger than the bound-state binding energy.  This implies that
>>>>> bound-state deuterons cannot even be _defined_ until ~100 fm/c
>>>>> have passed since the particles' last momentum transfer
>>>>> interaction, ie freezeout; this time frame cannot be described
>>>>> as "very near freezeout."  It really makes no sense to say that
>>>>> deuterons are "formed" on a timescale faster than they can even
>>>>> be distinguished or defined, whether inside the colliding system
>>>>> or following freezeout, so this whole passage of the
>>>>> introduction is really misconceived.
>>>>> The reason that sudden-approximation coalescence models can
>>>>> work is more subtle, quantum mechanically.  After the last
>>>>> momentum exchanges, ie freezeout, all the protons and neutrons
>>>>> will be in wavefunctions which span a range of masses around
>>>>> their free-particle on-shell rest mass.  The off-shell
>>>>> combinations of momentum and energy will decay away with time,
>>>>> ie the amplitude of those parts of the wavefunctions will
>>>>> diminish and only the on-shell states will have significant
>>>>> amplitudes.  So, looking into the future at the time of
>>>>> freezeout it is reasonable to count only the on-shell states
>>>>> for future accounting purposes; but the off-shell states are
>>>>> still present in the wavefunction at that time.
>>>>> For this reason, one can get reasonable answers from a
>>>>> coalescence model while neglecting these off-shell subtleties.
>>>>> But, by the same token, there is no excuse at this point in
>>>>> the field for leaving a sloppy definition of "formed" in the
>>>>> introduction to a paper like this, and the section should be
>>>>> rewritten without this misconception.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> (6) p1 col2: "Coalescence models assume that the distribution
>>>>> of clusters..."; "density" or "phase-space density" would be
>>>>> better than "distribution"
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> (7) p1 col2 and Eq. 1: The references [1-3] quoted to
>>>>> introduce the notation of the coalescence picture in Eq. 1
>>>>> are incomplete; they date from the Bevelac era (or earlier),
>>>>> when the notation C_2 was used for the proportionality
>>>>> similar to that in Eq. 1 but with cross sections rather than
>>>>> per-event densities.  The B_2 notation used here was originated
>>>>> during the AGS fixed-target heavy-ion program, starting with
>>>>> E858 and then E864 and E878; and it is a rather glaring
>>>>> omission that not all of these experiments are referenced in
>>>>> this paper, which should be corrected.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> (8) p1 col2: Mention is made of the n/p ratio in lower-energy
>>>>> collision data, but the meaning and significance are not clear
>>>>> at all.  What system was this for?  Does this n/p ratio
>>>>> correspond to that of the incoming nuclei, or not?  Is the
>>>>> implication that Eq. 1 should be modified, or assigned a 20%
>>>>> systematic error?  If not, why not?  The bare inclusion of
>>>>> this observation, without any details, explanation or
>>>>> implication is simply confusing and not helpful to the reader.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> (9) p2 col1: "B_2 carries information about the cluster"
>>>>> What do you mean by "cluster"?  Is it the deuteron itself, as
>>>>> implied on the previous page with the phrase "the distribution
>>>>> of clusters"?  Or does "cluster" mean the system as a whole?
>>>>> Neither really makes sense; B_2 doesn't really tell you
>>>>> anything about the deuteron itself per se; and it's strange,
>>>>> as well as inconsistent with the previous page, to refer to
>>>>> refer to the whole system as a "cluster".
>>>>>
>>>>> (10) p2 col1: "B_2 ... is consistent with measurements of
>>>>> the deuteron wave-function."  This is a very strange and
>>>>> jarring statement to read at this point in the paper, since
>>>>> there has been no discussion up to this point on how the
>>>>> deuteron's spatial properties figure into the value of B_2
>>>>> through the coalescence process or otherwise.
>>>>>
>>>>> (11) Also, this statement is referenced to Ref 5, but only
>>>>> vague mention is made of what collision systems or what
>>>>> collision energies are being referred to; this makes it
>>>>> somewhat strange to read in the very next sentence that
>>>>>> = 4.9 GeV is the threshold of "high energy".  It would
>>>>> be clearer to state the energy ranges, and at least whether
>>>>> heavy or light nuclei are involved, for all the data being
>>>>> referred to (this remark applies in several other places
>>>>> throughout the current paper, as already mentioned in
>>>>> point 8 above).
>>>>>
>>>>> (12) p2 col1: "assuming the region where the coalescence
>>>>> occurs has also a Gaussian shape"  See point 5 above; the
>>>>> region which sources/radiates the nucleons is not the same
>>>>> thing as the region where coalescence occurs.  Note also
>>>>> that "spatial profile" would be better than "shape" in
>>>>> this sentence.
>>>>>
>>>>> (13) p2 col1: "this ansatz ... facilitates comparison to
>>>>> interferometry radii".  A traditional point; but, how does
>>>>> the comparison work in this case?  First, should the R_G
>>>>> from the coalescence framework analysis be compared
>>>>> directly to any of the R parameters from HBT analysis?
>>>>> or is there a factor of 2, or pi, etc between them?
>>>>> Is this paper going to actually make the comparison?
>>>>> if not, then you should provide a reference to how the
>>>>> comparison should be done.
>>>>>
>>>>> (14) p2 col1: "However, it has been suggested that..."
>>>>> This certainly needs a reference, or several, at this point.
>>>>>
>>>>> (15) p2 col1: The middle paragraph discusses the results
>>>>> of deuteron production following a quark coalescence picture,
>>>>> which is a subject of considerable current interest.  However,
>>>>> the logic is not laid out clearly here.  Isn't it true, for
>>>>> example, that if protons follow the quark coalescence picture
>>>>> and deuterons follow the nucleon coalescence picture, then
>>>>> deuterons automatically/necessarily follow quark coalescence
>>>>> as well?  ie isn't quark coalescence for deuterons redundant
>>>>> with nucleon coalescence? and so not really an independent
>>>>> piece of information.  Alternatively, is the statement that
>>>>> deuterons follow quark coalescence equivalent to B_2 being
>>>>> constant with pT?  But here B_2 is not constant with pT, as
>>>>> we see in Fig 4; doesn't that have immediate implications for
>>>>> quark coalescence interpretation of the present data?
>>>>> In general this section should be written so as to make
>>>>> it clear to the reader what are, and are not, redundant versus
>>>>> independent pieces of information.
>>>>>
>>>>> (16) p2 col1: The start of the discussion of discussion of
>>>>> phase-space densities in the last paragraph should have at
>>>>> least a few references right at the beginning, especially
>>>>> as to the motivations.  Why is this an interesting quantity?
>>>>> The text mentions (i) an indicator or measure of the degree
>>>>> of equilibrium, which is directly connected to entropy,
>>>>> and (ii) "information about ... symmetrization efects".
>>>>> Reasonable enough; but what's the upshot?  What do the results
>>>>> shown in Fig 5 demonstrate?  Trends are noted in Section III,
>>>>> but what about the basic magnitude of the measured quantity?
>>>>> is it high, is it low?
>>>>>
>>>>> (17) p2 col2: The result of Eq. 5 is correct only for a true
>>>>> global equilibrium, with one universal temperature and where
>>>>> the particles have equal access to the entire relevant volume.
>>>>> The text acknowledges this, but only in a roundabout way with
>>>>> the later remark "we are ignoring the collective motion of the
>>>>> particles", as collective motion is a departure from true
>>>>> global equilibrium (also, "neglecting the possibility of" is
>>>>> more accurate than "ignoring" here).  But since collective
>>>>> motion probably is the case in RHIC Au+Au collisions, from the
>>>>> B_2 results shown here as well as a host of other evidence,
>>>>> it is left unclear to what extent Eq.'s 5 - 9 should still be
>>>>> considered relevant.  For example, in the statement farther down,
>>>>> attributed to Ref 23, that strong longitudinal flow could
>>>>> significantly reduce pion phase space densities, it is not clear
>>>>> if this is a true result about the actual density or an artifact
>>>>> of Eq. 5 and its corollaries being invalid in the extraction of
>>>>> the measured phase-space density.
>>>>> In general the utility of a framework which assumes global
>>>>> equilibrium to a system which probably exhibits only local
>>>>> equilibrium needs to be explained more carefully; if T is a
>>>>> function of space, then is Eq. 5 still true at a point?  In
>>>>> the case of collective motion being significant, is Eq. 3
>>>>> defined over some relevant coherence volume?  etc.
>>>>>
>>>>> (18) p2 col2: "the maximum space averaged phase-space density,
>>>>> which is at the center of the Gaussian source."  Sorry, but
>>>>> this makes no sense at al: a spatial average is not defined
>>>>> for different points within the space.  The confusion over
>>>>> the relevant spatial volumes mentioned in point 17 above
>>>>> is clearly causing serious trouble here.
>>>>>
>>>>> (19) p2 col2: In Eq. 9, is R_G a function of particle
>>>>> momentum, particularly pT?  Presumably so, and if so then it
>>>>> would be useful to write the dependence explicitly here.
>>>>>
>>>>> (20) Minor formatting: the text following Eq. 5 should
>>>>> probably be left-justified rather than indented.  It is not
>>>>> clear whether the text following Eq.'s 4 and 6 should or
>>>>> should not start new paragraphs, either.
>>>>>
>>>>> (21) The presentation of Eq. 6 in terms of chemical potential
>>>>> is formally correct, but at the same time obscure -- in the
>>>>> dilute limit, what is the value of these chemical potentials?
>>>>> Is it just the particle mass, which would make Eq. (6)
>>>>> equivalent to exp[-mT/T] at all rapidities?  or does it vary
>>>>> significantly with the net baryon density, which changes
>>>>> considerably with rapidity (as BRAHMS has made clear in
>>>>> other measurements)?
>>>>>
>>>>> (22) p5 col2: "expect the ratio of the proton and antiproton
>>>>> phase densities to be flat"; is this as a function of
>>>>> rapidity?  or pT?  or both?
>>>>>
>>>>> (23) Summary, but also relevant to several sections of the
>>>>> paper: There is a reasonable interpretation here that the
>>>>> B_2 and phase space density measurements have information
>>>>> about the existence of collective flow, particularly what
>>>>> is called radial flow.  This is certainly valuable and
>>>>> worth publishing.  However, the current paper doesn't say
>>>>> much about whether these implications are or are not
>>>>> consistent with the great body of work that has now been
>>>>> done on modeling RHIC A+A collisions with hydrodynamics.
>>>>> It is not necessarily the responsibility of this paper
>>>>> to make a full-blown analysis, but the reader deserves some
>>>>> basic orientation: are the results shown here generally
>>>>> consistent with existing hydrodynamical models?  or is
>>>>> there some kind of surprise or contradiction brewing?
>>>>>
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