Re: [Brahms-dev-l] Proceedings for DIS09 on Single Spin Asymmetries

Hi JH,
please consider the corrections and comments put below.
Best regards,
Pawel.

Introduction, line 10, "...have been on..." -> "...have been put on...

section 2, are you correcting for detection efficiencies (tracking + pid)?
if so, it should be mentioned.

I already saw fig.1 on the meeting. I think that it will improve the 
readability of the figure
if you use option "C" when drawing the model calculations. Now it is 
hard to see the data on the background
of jumping histograms.

last line in sect. 4, remove an extra "the"

Fig3 caption: "line"->"solid line", "broken" -> "broken line".
Are, you assuming that people will read only color version? The 
calculations for K- and K+ are
distinguishable only by colors!

page 4, lines 5,6, "The anti-protons .... as for K-. In Fig.3, inclusive 
protons ... " ->
"In Fig.3 the anti-protons ..... as for K-, however, inclusive protons 
....."

sect. 6. lines 8-9 "of normalized yields..... [15]" -> "... of 
normalized yields at y~0 of low- ...... divided
by the yield of highest-multiplicity events reconstructed ..... [15].

page 4 last sentence: "Single diffractive ... "-> Single diffractive 
....from a process characterized by a large ..... and the
forward rapidities extracted(selected) by excluding ...."

page 5. line 3: "there" ->"the"

last sentence of sect. 6 suggests that "energy conservation" is one of 
the "QCD effects", is it so?
The same for "collision geometry". Why you associate them with QCD?

Sect. 7, 1st sentence: "As the ... mechanism" -> "As the collision 
energy increases more pQCD applicable processes
are expected to dominate the process of generating (the) transverse SSAs."

Sect 7 last sentence: "... kinematic region and not mainly .... process" 
-> "... kinematic region and can not be described
by independent factorized processes alone".

Summary: "measured in BRAHMS" or "measured by BRAHMS"?



J.H. Lee wrote:
> Hi,
>
> The draft of proceedings for my talk
> "Cross-sections and Single Spin Asymmetries..."
> at DIS09 can be found at
> http://www.rhic.bnl.gov/~jhlee/dis09_ssa.pdf .
>
> Thank you in advance for any comments.
>
> JH
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